February 16, 2018 at 12:16 pm #7551
Before any one asks, the ‘I’s are meant to be lower case.🐨
<p style=”text-align: center;”>i am</p>
i am the shadow
i am the creature
In the back of the room
i am the backdrop
i am the grey shade
In the bright sunny sky
That you don’t
Really know at all
Or want to ever
i am the animal
i am the duckling
In the color of death
My own past failures
And my toppled dreams
i am nobody
i am every one
In the dead of the night
With my fists
On broken brick walls
i am the smiler
i am the actor
In the height of my act
And not give in to
i am forgotten
i am a dreamer
The world will always say
That they are
Another no one
February 17, 2018 at 7:04 pm #7555
Woah… That was honestly so powerful. The lead up to the last line was hugeee….I had no idea where it was heading! The only thing I don’t quite get is the second to last line “another gone.” I’m guessing it’s like saying they are also lost? Just wanted to verify!
…seriously i love this!!!!! :)))
February 21, 2018 at 10:34 am #7583
That was deep and thought provoking and ABSOLUTELY GORGEOUS!
“And not give in to” what? I honestly like that it trails off like that, it makes you finish the thought with your own struggle.
I just had an appointment with my orthodontist. I came away slightly sore and distinctly grumpy. This poem connected with me deeply and made me smile and cheer up a bit, in a rather morbid way. Thank you!
February 27, 2018 at 12:47 pm #7598
Yeah, that’s what it meant-actually, since lost and gone are both one one syllable, I may just replace ‘gone’ to make the ending more clear. Thanks for the comment!
And I’m glad you could connect with my depressing writing, pookajordan. Wait-no, that came out wrong. I’m glad this poem made you cheer up a little. 🐨
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